
The tunnel wound in labyrinthine twists through the depths of the underwater cavern. A dim light filtered through its membranous walls, blood red and eerie. The two children, their hands grasped together crept forward past smaller caves and other passages, constantly aware of the danger lurking within the depths of the only world they knew.
This was how it was. Always seeking refuge, always on their guard, tiptoeing forward, voices hushed - when they dared to speak at all.
The girl was the stronger of the two, more courageous. The boy was timid – not weak but of a more delicate nature – not created for a world such as this. He looked to his twin for guidance. She in turn focused on protecting them both.
She stopped and he felt the tension running from her arm into his. He paled, trembling. She squeezed his hand and pulled him into a nearby cave. They waited, listening, barely breathing.
In the distance they could hear the sound of damp slithering. They felt the presence of the creature seeking them, its tongue flickering, its maddened red eyes glancing this way and that. They could feel the movement of its search vibrating through the venous walls of the cavern, that living cavern that pulsated and throbbed in its self-created glowing light. It was a place that should have sustained and it was a light that should have nurtured them. Instead it was a place in which they were hunted, forced to live on their wits, terrorised at every twist and turn.
“It’s coming closer,” said the girl. “We must get out of here. It will sniff us out.”
“I’m frightened,” said the boy.
“I know, but we must get out of here before it gets any closer.”
The risk was great, they both knew it.
The boy quailed at the thought. He didn’t know how much longer he could go on like this. This was not a world in which he wanted to live. And if it was a taste of the world beyond, the world to which they were destined to go, then…
His knees buckled beneath him.
“I can’t go on,” he said looking up at his sister, his eyes weary, pleading.
“You must,” she said, tugging at his hand, pulling him to his feet.
“I can’t. I’ll slow you up.”
“No, you won’t, I’ll help you. I’m not leaving you here.”
He pulled his hand from hers as the serpent’s hissing breath slunk closer.
“I can’t do this anymore. I can’t. I haven’t the strength for this. Not anymore. I can’t go on.”
“You must,” the girl insisted. “I can’t leave you here.”
“No,” the boy said, gazing into her face, his expression softening. “This is no longer my journey. You have to go on alone.”
“But I don’t want to,” she whispered, struggling not to let her voice break into a wail.
He smiled at her. “I don’t think there’s a choice.”
She stared at him, at his pale, beautiful face. He may have been the frailer one, but the serenity of his wisdom was something she couldn’t doubt. He wasn’t meant for this world, nor the one beyond. His journey ended here. She knew that. Just as she knew it was only her resilience and fortitude which would enable her to survive - her sheer bloody-mindedness.
“Are you sure?” she said.
He nodded.
Her heart breaking, she turned from him and slipped across the passage, ducking down a side tunnel. Turning back for a brief moment, she saw the red and black of the serpent’s scaly body as it undulated in sinuous motion, its eyes glinting with self-obsessed greed, towards her brother.
Now she was on her own. And she would outwit it at every turn. It had got one of them, it would not get the other. She would fight it to the bitter end, she would fight for both of them, in this world, and in the sunlit one beyond.

24 comments:
I like the depiction of determination and lack of it in the twins..and I see both in myself, the strong and the week, sometimes its good to leave the weak part of the self behind to be devoured..and just walk along..
Beautiful story....
in a way this well written story is an analogy of what's going on in my life at the moment, the confusions and the conflicting demands, strength and too often the lack of it, the predators which lurk in the dark corners of the labyrinth of my mind...
thanks for this, it's given me something to mull over for a while...
keep well...
Oh, sure. Tear jerker for Mother's Day. Could you please post a warning that we need tissues to read this????
It's fantastically written, of course, else it wouldn't touch me so much. (My sister has twins, and while they both are fine & thriving, I could understand this story from that perspective.)
How's married life?
Hello Vanilla,
I particularly enjoyed the dialogue break. I have a lot to catch up on bt was just wondering if this story was part of something bigger..perhaps the one you were editing earlier?
Is there more? I feel like there should be more. I want to know about this world that the twins live in and why they're there. Why are they alone? What age are they? I can't imagine the choice between leaving a loved one and surviving. Very painful. I'm intrigued! You are such a good writer.
Is the first picture actually the second picture after a bit of doctoring?
Sorry abut my lack of posts recently - I've got writer's block!
More, please!
I enjoyed this. Nice imagery, and the photos go really well with it. Good job!
I guess there is balance in everything, Rambler and it's how we deal with or create that balance.
Thanks, Muriel.
Glad you liked the story, Bart, hope it triggers something useful for you. So great when people find a personal take in stories. Take care.
Sorry, Aerin! Will create a graphic of a tissue box for future reference :-)
Married life is just great, thank you!
No, Suzan, this was just a spur of the moment "one off" that wanted to be written yesterday morning. I am, however, beginning to wonder if there is more to it.
Thanks, Janey - no, as I said above, this was just what appeared yesterday morning. But I'm wondering if there isn't more to write...
And yes, the top picture is the bottom picture doctored.
Writer's block? Poor thing, hope it passes soon.
Thanks, David.
Thanks, Rob.
i just hoped till the end it would not happen and it feels sad to realise that the girl had no other choice but to leave her brother there.
What a powerful story made more so by its simplicity! Wow, griping stuff:-)
Dennis likes this story. Dennis would like to have a story like this read to him before every nap.
Good story, AV - I was waiting for the almighty scream at the end...
Addy
Cor! Is there more?!!! Ace that! You don't need this bit:
"The boy was timid – not weak but of a more delicate nature – not created for a world such as this. He looked to his twin for guidance. She in turn focused on protecting them both."
Cos your writing is strong and shows this in the passage...or so I think. It's ace!!! Have I already said that?
Oh, no. I don't want her to leave her brother. It's like a metaphor story to me, having lost two brothers too young.
Oh yes, Vanilla. What a terrific start. Indeed, there could be much more to it. :-)
What a strange and scary place -is it about birth?
What a great picture!
Beautiful cameo of life's struggles. Thank you! :-)
Beautiful, powerful and intriguing story, Vanilla. I too thought of birth, of being in the womb, of seeking and dreading the "sunlit world beyond"...
I am not sure why, but I was surprised from the very first words. I was surprised at what was happening, the events that unfolded. In a good way though, I took in each word, each sentence, as this world become clearer to me.
And I share what some other said before me, Is there more, I hope?
For me, in writing the piece, Lena, it didn't feel like the girl faced or took and easy decision.
Thanks, Anonymous.
Hmm, Dennis, wouldn't a story like this give you nightmares?
Thanks, Addy.
Cor! Gee! Thanks, Jon - and thanks for the feedback and input too! Ace, eh? Wow.
It's interesting the way this story has touched different people in different ways, Colleen but I think its strength lies in the fact that it does do just that.
Well, we'll see what happens, Suzan! :-)
Clever hound, that Mutley the Dog :-)
Thanks, Girl with the Mask.
Thanks, Merisi.
Thanks, Vesper - you've pretty much got the gist of the story!
Thanks, Witnessing - not sure if there is more, we'll have to see. I have a few ideas tumbling around in my head at the moment - but they are totally diverse - will have to see which idea wins! :-)
Wow, that was awesome. I want to knw more about this world, I want to know more about the twins. So can I read more?
N
i'm taking a break from this space, but you know where to find me!
xo
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